20 October 2008

Tough Love

Wow, it's been awhile since I've done one of these! It's been so long since I've written anything new, being so focused on revising and submitting. But, I managed to write and revise a new piece in two weeks, and still have it come out half-decent, at least according to the group...

The Good
  • Story was called "fun"
  • Character not a stereotype (a dancer turned soldier, trying to be a dancer again)
  • Message of the story was delivered "gently"
  • Good ending with a change in the character (or, an acceptance of that change on the character's part)
  • Story painted a picture of a future that was "right around the corner"
The Bad
  • Unclear at the outset that my protagonist was female
  • Character didn't seem feminine enough to one member; the occupational hazard of a male writing a female POV.
  • The secondary character was introduced early, but wasn't much of a character then.
  • Some minor story points that raised too many questions and were better off eliminated
  • Some "writerly" phrases better off eliminated, especially since they caused some confusion as to the setting.
The Ugly
  • Too many plot questions raised about the sci-fi element in the story, which some members admitted weren't necessarily central to the piece, although...
  • Those questions raised philosophical questions about the business of artistry and humanity
And, I haven't the first clue how to address that last issue... :(.